Post by daclown on Nov 9, 2007 20:34:22 GMT -5
A few of my friends who have seen my writing have told me that it's great and I should get it published. But I need opinions of people who will actually tell me if I need to improve and what I need to improve. This is especially important because I'm actually considering a career in writing. And yes I know, it sounds depressing but it's just something I whipped up. So opinions needed.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have won
This game that
I allowed you to play.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have taken my heart
Ripped it in two
And thrown it at my feet.
What am I suppose to do
Now that I have taken
Your clever little white lies
That I allowed you to tell me.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have left me
With nothing but the shell
Of who I used to be.
What am I suppose to do
Now that I'll never see you again
No matter how much
I wish it wasn't true.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have won
This game that
I allowed you to play.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have taken my heart
Ripped it in two
And thrown it at my feet.
What am I suppose to do
Now that I have taken
Your clever little white lies
That I allowed you to tell me.
What am I suppose to do
Now that you have left me
With nothing but the shell
Of who I used to be.
What am I suppose to do
Now that I'll never see you again
No matter how much
I wish it wasn't true.
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